She was sitting by the window watching the waves lashing at the wall... Those crazy waves made her smile.. her thoughts went back to the times when she was as crazy, as wild, without a care in the world.... just like these waves..... all the rendez-vous, the talks, the fights and the making up!!! It was all too fast for her taste but she just let herself go with the flow till one fine day she was in love, she was in love with the person she would love fighting with.... Initially it all sounded very weird to her but slowly she had grown to accept the fact that she was in love with him and there was possibly nothing that she could do about it!!
Time passd by... with them totally wrappd up in their lives..... yet sharing a major chunk of their lives with each other, the fears, the joys, the sorrows, the laughter, the tears, just about anything and everything... Each one had become an inseparable part of the other's life...
The craziness, that zest for the smallest things had all faded away with time... How they had seen the ups and the downs, the highs and the lows... The madness had transformed into sweetness. nurturing each other, cherishing each other and relishing each other over the years.... All the years spent together had probably gotten them closer like never before... But time had come to take the final call!! He was indecisive like always and she had been waiting for him like always....
But this situation was not like always.... This time around, she was not there to help him with his decisions, to think with him, to discuss the pros and the cons!!! This once, he was all alone at crossroads without her to help him through.... He missed her, he loved her, he could'nt take a single step without her.... He knew his decision, he did'nt even need to make it, his heart had done it for him..........
He went to her place with flowers thinking of what he wanted to say.... Throughout the way he had planned what he meant to say to her... And as he entered the doorway, he saw her sobbing and he almost ran to comfort her but he stopped dead in his tracks watching the site he saw there... There she was with someone handing out a handkerchief to her, wiping her tears away!!! He had never known about him... And he looked like he would keep her happy too, maybe not as much as he himself would but... what could be done now?? Silently he dumped the flowers in the dustbin and started walking home with heavy steps and tears streaming all along the way.... He kept walking and walking and after what seemed like an eternity reached home...
He put the key in the lock and tried to open it but it would'nt as his eyes were feeling a little dull from all the crying... And then suddenly she opens the door!!! He was shocked to see her and asked her why she was there when she should've been with him.... She slapped him and instantly hugged him like she would never let him go... The tears in her eyes told him everything that he wanted to hear... This had always been the highlight of their relationship, actions always had spoken more than words.... Some missing bits were there, of course but they did'nt matter for now! When they were in each other's arms!!!... After a long moment, she replied she knew he was there because of the pink orchids that she saw in the bin.... And only he knew she loved pink orchids... Her heart skipped a beat and she bid a quick gudbye to her cousin and took the first cab to come "home" finally to him... to b with him forever..
From that day till today, life had only been a wonderful journey... They had fought when they were younger but now even those fights had become fewer as they knew each other better than ever before... She missed those times she cried, she fought yet somehow this phase also seemed extremely satisfying... And then she looked outside... The waves had all disappeard now and the sea was calm again just like how she was!!! She hid a smile and went back to making dinner for the love of her life...
1 comment:
A good story idea indeed, but hey did u got confused in between, you had started with her thoughts and position but u dramatically changed the scenario to him....and now here u committed a mistake...she was watching waves sitting by window and then he see her in his way with her cousin...now do u find any relation there ? u would have done better if u have visualised the story from the concept of the lady or the gentleman...i mean the flow would have been maintained....
she was thinking about him and the quarrels they had in the times...she thought about the days when they were stangers and met for the first time with a quarrel begining between them, but then they dint realised when these quarrels turned into love....years have passed , they still fight but this time it is different...he has without any reasons been angry on her. its better he learns his lesson now.... she looks at the rising waves...... she is indecisive...she hates herself for being what she is .....how she had made herself fall for him.....the door bell rings breaks the flow of thoughts she was having...its his cousin who has come to take her to meet his gf.....while she was stepping down to ground floor with him....she felt someone is watching them....she comes down but no one is there....a mistake maybe her instincts had made....she is inside the car....the cousin is driving .....and just few minutes had passed and she yells "STOP" ....oh my god ! how could i ignore that......she had seen the Red orchids in dustbin near the steps......yes he was there......it could only be him..........only in the world he knew that she loved red orchids...........
nah....i m not tryin to b oversmart....i liked ur story ...and this is just a suggestion....if u dont like my suggestion assume it as one of my mistakes.......
on this u get a 8 for language and 5 for the flow .....and 10 for the story idea together i would say u get a 7/10 from me ....
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